okay, everyone, let's have some fun!
here is my kabita....

"Hijo Raati"
Paani aayo
Jaado bhayo
Eklai thiye
Raksi piye
Lotne, matne
Tapai laai dhatne
Maile tyattikai lekhe
Sapana matra dekhe....

You suck a&& bro...try another one..

I see a kuire Laxmi prasad devkot in the making.

Donno abt others, but I enjoyed it. Kudos.

Mero taraf bata...

Hijo maile mail khole
afai sanga bole
ekchin soche
masu lai ghoche (oven ma rakhnulai)

Tv here(e)
channel fere
jurruka uthe,
Bahira tira munte

Jason, Bill(ie) ra jess ko ma gaye ( sideko chimeki ho)
3 bottle corona bhaye
khanna khanna bhanda bhandai
ghuttuka siddaye

Ghar aye ekchin base
Feri mail here
nidra ayoo
timi aynau

(Ani pani barsiyo, sutnai paryo) :)

IndisGuise:)

hotstuff, timi le kina gali garyo
mero maya ta maryo
maile kabita lekhna najanneko ke!
tara pani maile koshis gare
malai kina dukha diyo?
timro man maa kina ris thiyo?

ani indi dai,
dhanyabad tapai laai
hajur ko kabita ramro bhayo
malai pani dherai hasayo
ahile ta yati nai ho
mero dimag ta khattam bho

Tyo, gali hoina Palpali.I was just commenting on your peom. Anyways, I liked the new one "Hotstuff Bro'" You are getting better. Keep on writing. Sorry about the first comment. I shouldn't be discouraging you about your writing.

त्यो अौंशीको कालो रात
झलमल्ल चन्द्मा

Tyo aunshi ko kalo raat
jhalmalla chandrama

hotstuff, i know it wasn't "gali" but i needed it to rhyme d@mmit! i'd also like to point out the title of this thread is "BAD poetry"! i'm not mindgames. this is just for self-entertainment....and i'm glad you like the new poem, but i'm wondering why all of a sudden your name has gone from "Hotstuff" to "HOTSTUFF"!?! sajha ko user name haru case-sensitive hoina ra?!

Kasto sano/nano kuro ki samateko khaire dai le. Babababa.

Case sensetive hoina jhaure
So u can now be PALPALI_GAULE
Lu ta ekchin lai bida pau
janu cha malai yeuta thau.

:)

यो धागो रमाईलो लाग्यो
बदलिको दिन घमाईलो लाग्यो /

त्यो औंशीको कालो रात
झलमल्ल चन्द्रमा /

paach bajyo
ma ta lucky ho
jaane aba
samjhane indi baba
aaja laai bhayechha
hakim le balla khayechha
ahile ta chhodne kaam
hare shiva! hare ram!

gaule tapai ke palpa kaii ho ta..
palpali raja ta pagal juncha sunya thihin
gaule parnu bhayo ramrai kabita lekhnu hundo rahecha..

tara arko thauma pheri tapaile baltimore ma jammeko ma bhanuu bhathiyo..
ani arko thauma ma ma new york ko thita..
pheri ahiley auta boring kabita.
aaaja padhna namanlageko din tetttikaii bityooo..

la mero je paii teyi kabita tapiilaii kasto lagchha...
aba class sake pachee ma tes ko uttor paunu parney ho paunchu naii hola jpt..

the sweater song
last night
inside my sweater
i found
a piece of u
still stuck, glowing
long after u were gone

kaam pani saakyo
jau aba kaha
sochda sochdai time gayo
homework ta kata kata

skul pani dhilo aaye
sabaijana kaha gaye
aayera here feri yehi dhago
kina ho kina ho ....
bad poem ta lekhi halye

here's one from my side

साझा खोलेँ
यो थ्रेड देखेँ
अनि एकछिन सोचेँ

साथीहरुको कबिता पढेँ
पढ्दै अघि बढेँ
पढ्दा पढ्दै अलिकती मैले पनि लेखेँ

अरु पनि थ्रेड हेरेँ
निकै बेर भुलेँ
तर घुमिफिरी यही थ्रेडमै फर्केँ

सबैले सबैको कबिता राम्रो छ भने
सबेको कबितालाई मैले नि माने
अनि गाउँले जीको थ्रेडमा म झोले पनि कबि बनेँ

have nice one guys

Dimag ma cha ghiroula
Mann ma cha ghiroula
Kahiley kaha pauney hola yo ghiroula?

Bhana na timi kina risa ko mero pyaro ghiroula?
Amrika aayera ek choti pani pa chaina darshan timro ghiroula
Dherai luki na basa ma sanga, ma ta pagal huna lagi sakey timi bina mero ghiroula

Cha euta sathi Ghimirey
Jasley malai jhan dincha yaad ghoroula ko
Barsau barsa bitey sakyo tara mailey khana pa chaina ghiroula

Aba ta mero chittai dukhi sakyo,mann nai marna lagi sakyo....harey yo ghiroula
Tara malai biswas cha, huney cha milan ek din ma ra mero ghiroula ko
Tyo din lai parkhi base chu, yaad ma ghiroula ko

i am sleepy
& hungry
anyone has food
that's good?

one more day to go
why is today very slow?
ok off to get some food
i dunno if it will be good

lol, that's the worst poem I could come up with.

no meera
u write worse poem than that
u have in fact
written
worse than that
that one about
i can't remember what it was
but it was
pretty boring

ke karako sab jana
bhat pakyo aau khana
pirka mathi basa, haat dhou
palenti kasa, janai uuthai
hagna jasto basne hoina,
thyappa basa, kati bhat kahne?
daal kati halne? tarkari kati, achar khane?
khayo hagyo khayo hagyo
katti garna sakcha
din bhari hagera tero chaak paakcha
dhido khau, hagna jau
jasto khayo testai aau
ani tyo pani khau.
ani birami hou hospital jau
ani Mora, ani bhagwan ka jau!

Palpali gaulejee, myself a palpali too. Where abouts in Palpa do you hail from btw?
Anyway, here is my bad poem.

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Every time I feel lonely
I believe I need you!
For me to whisper how much ?I love you?
To embrace you to say You?re the one ? I wish to die for?
But as usual you aint there
Not in my proximate vicinity!!
It?s the wildest imagination, I keep seeing you
In my arm?s reach to exchange a warm subtle kiss in this chill night
Suddenly, reality bites me you?re far way??
hundreds of miles away for heavens? sake
I grab my phone to reach you
Not realizing my long distance services has been suspended
Long before??..having called you repeatedly for hours n failing to pay in time
poor me???. Glad, at least got few pegs of scotch left??..cheers dear!!!

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ye yo kasto gajab ko thread
phateko gundri jasto mookh layera
ke khana aako paakdai napakeko bhaat
dekhaidey na ritto kasawudi..sakdainus!!!
para bata bhanchey karayo
khichadi khwauna parcha rati ko pawuna lai
ewuta janni paltyo
satyanaasi! anikaal ko pawuna
chaidaina malai dharma garna
aba ko buddha janmincha ra pheri?
atyachari karayo woota bata....
ho tyaslai thoknu parcha
bujhya ho...???
tyastai huncha rey hamro Nepal ma
goalmaal..goalmaal
netagiri ko rajniti jasto
hallagiri ko bhaandbhailo jasto
mawobadi ko rananiti jasto
baru.......
wooddar garam hai hamro Nepal ko
bharey whitehouse agadi nara lawuna janu cha
pharkelaas ni pheri !!
Saabdhaan!!! pheri visa nadela hai
clueless! clueless!! clueless!!!